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Nicole Rivera's avatar

Wow, I felt like I fell right in with them! This was great!

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Erin Lunde's avatar

Thanks!

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Ty Richardson's avatar

Wow. I didn't see that coming. I, too, was immediately taken in by the voice telling the story; later, by the weirdness. Really good weirdness!

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Erin Lunde's avatar

I’m glad it was good weirdness. :)

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Sarah G. Young's avatar

Great story! I was drawn in right from the beginning by the character's voice. I enjoyed the vivid visual descriptions too and the blend of reality and imagination!

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Erin Lunde's avatar

Thanks for reading!

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nibbins the cat's avatar

A really strong narrative voice there - one to use again I think

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Erin Lunde's avatar

Thank you for reading!

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Postcard Inkblot's avatar

This was a very interesting read. I liked how you effectively entered into the mind and imagination of a child. Question is, how do you get back out? Asking for a, uh friend.

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Erin Lunde's avatar

Thank you so much for reading. :)

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